Hey y'all, I'd like some feedback on this little ditty I just composed.

[Click to view comic: 'All-Star Game']

You made me laugh harder than a penis gets when a man is really aroused.

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Sex Piano.

Wow, if all your comics are as good as your first one then... they'll all be quite good

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Scratch and sniff porn isn't as good as I'd hoped

really? I didn't think it was quite that good.

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I made a couple more, and more will be forthcoming. Constructive criticism, not just a "like it," "don't like it" thing would be nice, too, if you've got the time. Thanks.

Dungeons and aussies was closer to on the right track. I think the thing I don't like is that the punchlines arent strong enough to support the comics. Like, with Savior, it had potential...but I just dont think it reached a point of really being funny.

As far as the first one, I dont wanna touch THAT one with a 400 foot pole.

Dungeons and Aussies showed that you have potential though. Keep it up, I am sure we will be seeing funny things from you.

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Your latest is the best in the offering. It has a punchline and sorta' makes sense. The others... Well, some people can make that surreal style of humor work, but your attempts come out as rather ho-hum.

Keep up with the more traditional three-panel set-up type strips and you will be good. That straightforward stuff is kind of refreshing, actually.

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Ham-fisted ham fisting.

heh heh, like boinky...man, sometimes that kid cracks me up. Other times...well...

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Ok, that first one is awesome. And the last one is awesome. Kangaroos can't talk!

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Sex Piano.

I LIKE 'EM!

I like your comics. They're more intelligent than the average strip.

Jason

well...I wouldnt call a punchline of "ya know, cuz he's got AIDS now" intelligent. haha.

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ass.

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